Recently, college students are coming forward about being a
victim of rape/sexual assault. USC student Tucker Reed claims to be one and has
even alerted the school officials about her happening. But the main problem of
this issue is that the officials did a meager investigation on it, declaring
that there was little proof of it occurring. This led to Tucker and other
claiming victims to complain about this problem to the U.S. Department of
Education, which somewhat brought about an array of investigations of rape/sexual
assault in other colleges and universities around the country.
In the beginning of this article, author Jason Song started
off with a small declaration as his hook that basically introduced what the
following paragraphs will pertain to. Each paragraph included information that is
still relevant to the main idea of this essay, which is that the college
student believes that her school handled a problem inadequately. Each of the
sections are connected one right after another, meaning that as the problem was
presented first, then each contained new information that still connects to one
right before. Song’s attitude to this issue seems to be neutral, since the
entire article is somewhat just addressing the problem and stating its
consequence.
Overall, this essay did not really hint any type of
side-choosing on this issue. I don’t think it’s fair that the USC school
officials “swept aside” this situation. Since most victims of rape/sexual
assault usually keep quiet about this type occurrence, it is extremely courageous
for someone to speak out about it, like Reed did. With that being said, the
school officials should at least ATTEMPT at finding evidence, instead of just brushing
it off. It’s not always easy to confess something that makes you look vulnerable.
Your article was well structured and was concise. You went straight the point and was clear with the original topic. You had a good article choice since this topic is not only relevant in colleges and in universities, but around the world. Your personal opinion on the way the officials handled the incident enhanced your article. Good Job :)
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